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Band 7.5-8.5 — Youth Crime in Cities

In many cities, crime committed by young people is increasing. What are the causes of this trend? What solutions can you suggest?

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Rates of crime committed by young people are rising in many cities. This essay will examine the main causes of youth crime and then suggest how it can be reduced.

Two causes lie at the root. The first is lack of opportunity and hope. Young offenders come overwhelmingly from neighbourhoods with failing schools, few jobs and visible inequality; when legitimate routes to money and status look closed, gangs offer income, protection and identity that nothing else provides. The second cause is absent guidance. Where family life has broken down and role models are missing, teenagers take their values from the street and from social media, which today glamorise quick money and violence, and quarrels that once ended in arguments now escalate online into real attacks.

The solutions must match these causes. First, prevention through opportunity: investment in schools, apprenticeships, sports clubs and youth centres in poor districts gives teenagers something real to lose, and cities that funded such programmes — Glasgow's violence-reduction strategy is a famous example — cut youth violence dramatically by treating it as a social problem rather than only a policing one. Second, guidance and early intervention: mentoring schemes that pair at-risk teenagers with adult role models, support for struggling parents, and swift but constructive consequences for first offences — repairing damage and meeting victims rather than prison, which mostly hardens young offenders and connects them with older criminals.

In conclusion, young people turn to crime when opportunity is absent and guidance has failed, and both causes can be addressed. Cities that combine opportunity, mentoring and intelligent early intervention have proved that youth crime is not inevitable — it is neglect made visible.

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Phân tích: Dạng: Two-question. Bố cục: câu chủ đề giải pháp tuyên bố nguyên tắc (The solutions must match these causes) — nói thẳng cho giám khảo thấy tính liên kết. Từ vựng: legitimate routes to money and status, glamorise quick money, early intervention, hardens young offenders, câu kết neglect made visible — định nghĩa lại hiện tượng trong ba từ. Ngữ pháp: mệnh đề quan hệ chuỗi và cấu trúc gives teenagers something real to lose. Ví dụ Glasgow — đúng loại evidence “thành phố có thật, chính sách có tên” tạo độ tin.
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