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Band 7.5-8.5 — Compulsory Community Service?

Some people believe that all young adults should be required to do a period of unpaid work helping people in their community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes suggested that every young adult should complete a period of unpaid community service, such as helping the elderly or cleaning public spaces. While such work brings clear benefits, I only partly agree, because making it compulsory could undermine the very values it aims to teach.

On the one hand, community service is undeniably good for young people and for society. Volunteers learn responsibility, teamwork and empathy — qualities that classrooms struggle to teach — while hospitals, charities and neighbourhoods receive help they could never afford to hire. A teenager who spends a summer assisting in a care home, for example, gains patience and communication skills that will serve any future career, and often a sense of purpose as well. Such schemes also connect generations and strengthen local communities, which modern city life tends to weaken.

On the other hand, forcing everyone to volunteer changes the nature of the activity. Work done under compulsion is rarely done with enthusiasm: resentful participants may treat the service as a punishment, doing the minimum required and learning little. There are also practical objections. Many young adults must earn money to support families or fund their studies, and an unpaid obligation would weigh most heavily on the poorest. A better approach is strong encouragement — school programmes, university credit and public recognition — which preserves the willingness that gives volunteering its value.

In conclusion, I agree that community service benefits both young people and society, but I disagree that it should be compulsory for all. Voluntary schemes supported by schools and employers achieve the same goals without turning generosity into an obligation.

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Phân tích: Dạng: Agree/Disagree (Partly). Bố cục Partly chuẩn mực: Body 1 công nhận lợi ích, Body 2 phản biện đúng chữ khoá “required”, kết bài tách bạch hai vế agree/disagree trong một câu. Từ vựng: a sense of purpose, under compulsion, weigh most heavily on the poorest, turning generosity into an obligation — cụm kết mang tính cách ngôn, dễ nhớ dễ tái sử dụng. Ngữ pháp: mệnh đề quan hệ rút gọn (qualities that classrooms struggle to teach), cấu trúc chêm xen bằng gạch ngang để liệt kê giải pháp thay thế. Bài ghi điểm nhờ lập luận chắc và từ vựng tự nhiên, không phô trương.
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